by Gargantuan Gargantua » Fri Jan 17, 2014 8:50 am
This guy have lot of charisma.
Evan Solomon · Dishwasher/Prep at Red Lion Hotel on the River Jantzen Beach
Hey Joshua, I read your paper and I am very disappointed with your grammar. You really need to work on this. It's imperative to actually use punctuation, and to cut down on redundancy. It's imperative, as in order to get your point of view across, you need to have clear, concise language skills. Random capitalizations and run on sentences muddle you're statement and sound unprofessional. You also need to use proper sentence structure. "I can fair to say" is not how English works. You need to re-read before submitting your work to be graded. As for the subject matter itself. You do not list any sources, so sweeping claims that speak for the whole fandom kind of fall flat, any evidence you do posit is very circumstantial and seems to be coming from a more personal view than any basis of fact. When writing a persuasive essay, you need to rely and hard facts to sell your opinion, and you need for it to speak outside of the range of Godzilla fans if you want more support. Who is this article for? I'm sorry Joshua, but I have to give you a 62% on this. I know you're better than this. I will give you an opportunity to make this up after school, Thursday of next week. See you then!
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· 4 hours ago
Jacob Welch · Claremore High School
This was absolutely unreadable.
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· 3 hours ago
LOL the first two comments.