Monster Zero x SciFi Japan - Archive Only

A weird idea (well after having another franchise disappoint you that you want to leave can do that to you).


It talks about the battle that takes place 20 years before Final Wars.

If I remember correctly, wasn't it twenty years ago (I read it from the summary provided on the message boards here). If that is true then I'll see about making the adjustments.

Heads up, just finished chapter 3 of Operation: Final Strike.

Added chapter 4 of Operation: Final Strike. Please read and review.

Interesting stuff. Looking forward to the action when it comes.

In general, the writing is good, but at times unclear and unfocused. I found myself reading passages two or three times in an attempt to follow what you were trying to say. Not big problems, but definitely a hindrance to the smooth flow of the story.

Some nit-picky technical things:
I don't know how familiar you are with Japanese surnames, or how you chose the surnames for your characters, but several stood out as a bit unusual: Hakauyate, Udea, and to a lesser extent, Arigama.

I have never heard of these as Japanese surnames, and a quick search revealed no examples. Of course, there are always exceptions, but since you appear to be striving for a very realistic portrayal of Japan and all things Japanese in your story, I thought you'd like an opinion on this point.

Also, at one point you list Yokosuka and the Inland Sea in a slightly confusing passage that might lead some to think that Yokosuka was near the Inland Sea, which it is not (by about 500 kilometers).

Anyway, it's obvious that you are putting a lot of work into your story, and I hope you are encouraged to continue to do so.

And thank you so much for not including a "beautiful Japanese scientist/Kaijuologist/reporter/whatever" in your story. That has to be the most cliched device in Kaiju fan fiction.
(My apologies if one was coming later!)

Let me check to make sure I have everything correct thus far.

Updated with chapter 5 of my fanfic.

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